| Combining Sentences |
| #1 |
Janet skated onto the pond. She made a perfect figure eight. How do we combine the sentences? A) Janet skated onto the pond, but she made a perfect figure eight. B) Janet skated onto the pond and made a perfect figure eight. C) Janet skated onto the pond, so made a perfect figure eight. |
B Janet skated onto the pond and made a perfect figure eight. |
| #2 |
My dog has hair hanging over his eyes. He looks just like a dust mop. Combine the two sentences. A) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, he looks just like a dust mop. B) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, or he looks just like a dust mop. C) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes looks just like a dust mop. D) My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, and he looks just like a dust mop. |
D My dog has hair hanging over his eyes, and he looks just like a dust mop. |
| #3 |
My friend shares her lunch with me. She doesn't like what her dad packs. Combine the sentences. A) My friend shares her lunch with me, so she doesn't like what her dad packs. B) My friend shares her lunch with me, then she doesn't like what her dad packs. C) My friend shares her lunch with me because she doesn't like what her dad packs. D) My friend shares her lunch with me she doesn't like what her dad packs. |
C My friend shares her lunch with me because she doesn't like what her dad packs. |
| #4 |
Melanie forgot her lunch. She called her mother. Combine the sentences. A) Melanie forgot her lunch because she called her mother. B) Melanie forgot her lunch, so she called her mother. C) Melanie forgot her lunch and called her mother. D) Melanie forgot her lunch so she called. Her mother. |
B Melanie forgot her lunch, so she called her mother. |
| #5 |
If I have time. I ride on the bike trail at the park. Combine the 2 sentences/phrases. A) If I have time and I ride on the bike trail at the park. B) If I have time I like to ride. On the bike trail at the park. C) If I have time, I like to ride on the bike trail at the park. D) If I have time, and I like to ride on the bike trail at the park. |
C If I have time, I like to ride on the bike trail at the park. |
| Edit |
| #1 |
What correction should be made to this sentence? Last summer my family went to visit Aunt Hilda in alaska. |
Alaska is the name of a state--capitalize it! |
| #2 |
What correction should be made to this sentence? Alaska is rich in forests wildlife, and minerals. |
Comma in a series! Alaska is rich in forests, wildlife, and minerals. |
| #3 |
What correction should be made to this sentence? Gertrude Ederle was a great american swimmer. |
American is a nationality--capitalize it! |
| #4 |
What correction should be made to this sentence? It did not take her long to turn casual swiming into a competitive profession. |
swiming is spelled swimming |
| #5 |
What correction should be made to this sentence? She went to the 1924 olympics and won a gold medal as part of the U.S. swim team. |
Olympics- historical event |
| What is wrong? |
| #1 |
What is wrong? After the tents are set up by the lake. |
This is not a complete sentence. It is a fragment. |
| #2 |
What change should be made? I like to read stories aloud, Sam said to his mother. |
You need quotation marks around the words that Sam says! 'I like to read stories aloud,' Sam said to his mother. |
| #3 |
What change should be made? He then climbed inside the canoe he made his way across the lake. How would you correct this? A) He then climbed inside the canoe and made his way. Across a lake. B) He then climbed inside the canoe. And he made his way across the lake. C) He then climbed inside the canoe made his way across the lake. |
This is a run on sentence. There are actually 2 sentences that have a common subject- HE. Combine the sentence by telling the 2 things he did with an 'and' to join the actions. He then climbed inside the canoe and made his way across the lake. |
| #4 |
What change should be made? She was a year old. Before we learned about her unusual skill. How should it be written? |
The second part is not a complete sentence. She was a year old before we learned about her unusual skill. |
| #5 |
What change should be made? And brought her inside and made her a house dog. How would you make this sentence correct? |
This sentence does not tell WHO. We brought her inside and made her a house dog. |
| Editing More |
| #1 |
What change, if any, should be made in this sentence? How would you get rid of a huge colony of bees! |
This is a question! How would you get rid of a huge colony of bees? |
| #2 |
What change, if any, should be made in this sentence? My mom desided to call some local beekeepers. |
desided is spelled incorrectly. decided |
| #3 |
What change, if any, should be made in this sentence? On saturday the beekeepers came to our house. |
Saturday is the name of a day of the week. It should be capitalized. |
| #4 |
What change, if any, should be made in this sentence? The beekeepers was happy to have all our bees. |
Should be The beekeepers were happy to have all our bees. |
| #5 |
What change, if any, should be made in this sentence? He took all the bees away in two boxs. |
boxs should be written boxes |
| Revision |
| #1 |
Read this paragraph: (1) Dr. Jane Goodall is known for her work with animals. (2) She became well known by studying how animals act. (3) And live to become famous. (4) For more than 30 years, she studied the chimps in Africa. How should sentences 2 and 3 be combined? A) She became famous by studying how animals act and live. B) Well known she became by studying how animals act and live. C) By studying how animals act and live, she became well known and famous. D) To become famous and well known, she began studying how animals act and live. |
A She became famous by studying how animals act and live. Well known and famous mean the same thing so we don't need to say them both. |
| #2 |
Read the paragraph: (5) Dr. Goodall was born in London, England. (6) She was born on April 3, 1934. (7) When Jane was young, she read may books on wild animals. (8) Later on, she wrote about them as if they were her friends. (9) Sometimes she imagined that she was living with them. (10) She dreamed of going to Africa. (11) She wanted to see wild animals in nature. Which of these conclusions should be added to the end of this paragraph? A) She had an amazing collection of animal pictures. B) This area was known for having wild animals. C) She hoped one day to become a scientist so she could study animals in their habitats. D) This study of chimps made her famous. |
C) She hoped one day to become a scientist so she could study animals in their habitats. |
| #3 |
Read this paragraph: (12) In 1957, two friends invited Jane to visit Africa. (13) Finally, her dream of seeing htese animals was coming true. (14) A few months after she arrived in Africa, she met a famous scientist. (15) His name was Dr. Louis Leakey. (16) Dr. Leakey needed someone smart to help him examine chimps in the wild. (17) After meeting Jane Goodall, he knew that he had found the finest person for the job. (18) In 1960, Jane began to study chimps. (19) Dr. Goodall continued studying them for the next 35 years. The writer would like to add the following sentence to the paragraph. Tell the best place to put the sentence. At first it was difficult for her to be alone with the chimps, but she soon learned to enjoy watching them in the wild. |
Since this sentence tells about studying the chimps, it should go after sentence 18. |
| #4 |
Read the paragraph: (20) She learned that they were more like humans than people used to think. (21) She watched the chimps playing and she watched the chimp eating and she watched the chimps caring for their young and she watched the chimps making tools. (22) She wrote reports about all the things she saw. (23) Her reports taught the rest of the world how chimps behave. The writer would like to add a central idea statement to the beginning of the paragraph. Which of these sentences would be the best choice? A) While in Africa, she enjoyed the weather. B) Over the years, she wrote many letter home. C) Now that she was older, she planned to return to England. D) While studying the chimps, she discovered many new things about chimps. |
D) While studying the chimps, she discovered many new things about chimps. |
| #5 |
Read the following paragraph: (24) In 1977, Dr. Goodall created the Jane Goodall Institute. (25) Its office is located in Silver Spring Maryland. (26) The institute teaches people about chimps. (27) It also teaches people how to save the wild areas where the chimps live. (28) Dr. Goodall doesn't live among the chimps any longer. (29) She still gives speeches and writes about her experiences. (30) She hopes that more people will become interested in these wonderful animals. The writer would like to add a transition between sentences 28 and 29. Which transition word works the best? A ) Then, B ) While, C) First , D) However, |
However is the best choice. There is a contrast in ideas-she no longer lives with the animals so you would not expect her to be talking and writing about them. |
